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Detach Vs Luciel

  by ChiefDestiny

Detach Vs Luciel

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ChiefDestiny

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Detach was restlessly trying to find more duelist to fight. After his last 2(3) duels he lost. Detach is determined to fight to win for the first time. And will he win this time?

Vote here! http://www.hyunsdojo.com/community/viewtopic.php?f=49&t=16897&p=155358#p155358

Music : Horizon Zero Dawn battle music, Bird chirping sfx
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Xyskal

· 1515989148
I'd suggest not stopping the action mid-fight for an explanation like that, or for dialogue in general. And you should consider trying to use smoother lines for faces, and actually coloring in people's eyes. And why were they suddenly flying during that angle change with the head?
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ChiefDestiny

  Xyskal · 1516013885
Ah thanks for the CnC. I didn't know that criticism could be this painful lol.. but thanks for telling me what to improve. Also i dont understand what were you talking about with the "And why were they suddenly flying during that angle change with the head?"
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Xyskal

  ChiefDestiny · 1516047328
https://orig00.deviantart.net/55b3/f/2018/015/3/d/capture_by_xyskal-dc03shq.png

They're not touching the ground for this entire sequence.
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ChiefDestiny

  Xyskal · 1516058028
oh.. im so ashamed :( lol ok thx for telling telling me :D
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SuXeSoN

· 1515849764
I like how this went! Although there are a few inaccuracies with LuCiel. (like the fact he doesn't use poison unless needed, and that he only secret toxins using his mouth.)

I see that you're improving though! Keep it up man! I'll have my video uploaded soon. I just have to fix my SFXs :3
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ChiefDestiny

  SuXeSoN · 1515851465
Thanks!! Best of luck to both of us :D
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Date Submitted: January 13th, 2018, 3:49 am
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